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Post by voiceofgod on Feb 1, 2006 12:42:55 GMT -5
Sweet Seduction
Sweetly tasting of Monday picked roses
She’ll leave me by this short week’s end
Her sweet ripe love lingers like a child’s laughter
Like a splintered spike inside a holy friend
Her Judas covered alibi is swift and flies tomorrow
Within my thoughts beside myself
I whisper sighs of sorrow
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Post by SparrowsSoliloquy on Feb 5, 2006 20:31:04 GMT -5
Man.. I have GOT to get back to writing..! great work VOG..! VOG.. have you ever wrote before? Do you keep a journal? just curious:)
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Post by voiceofgod on Feb 6, 2006 18:05:30 GMT -5
Man.. I have GOT to get back to writing..! great work VOG..! VOG.. have you ever wrote before? Do you keep a journal? just curious:) I've written my entire life. I have probably fifty or sixty notebooks full of words. That's all I've ever really known. |
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Post by TheAnomicSoul on Feb 7, 2006 2:31:43 GMT -5
Man.. I have GOT to get back to writing..! great work VOG..! VOG.. have you ever wrote before? Do you keep a journal? just curious:) Good to hear you are writing again, I am looking foward to what promises to be beautiful poetry from you again. |
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Post by SparrowsSoliloquy on Feb 11, 2006 0:39:32 GMT -5
I will work on something this weekend Kev!!  Thanks for all the inspiration guys! oh and vog I sent you a pm..  you keep a journal too? that is cool. I havent written in mine in awhile. I only gravitate towards it when Im going through a lot of stuff.. and when I just feel like writing. I think journals are great.. I only started one about five years ago..... love- Jen |
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Post by voiceofgod on Feb 11, 2006 9:42:31 GMT -5
Hey Jen! Got your PM and sent ya one book. And now, my latest failure:
Feelings For Feb 8th
My face still doesn’t fit this place
Denim jeans and flannel don’t compare to dollar bills
I am out matched and over dated
I disappear like fog in the mist of a dark field
Out of my mind to think you care
Caught up in your array of freshly cut diamonds
I don’t have the patience to be arrogant
Some of us actually have to work for a living
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Post by voiceofgod on Feb 11, 2006 9:43:02 GMT -5
Against The Grain
I’m the apprentice
To this scent’s enticing
I learn the voodoo of a woman at night
Inside the fire
The swamp is melting
She whispers orders I can never get right
Another forest
Goes up the chimney
You can’t understand what they never taught
I know the meaning
Of chasing hurricanes
Against the grains of sand this love’s never caught
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Post by TheAnomicSoul on Feb 15, 2006 2:59:09 GMT -5
lol your great
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Post by voiceofgod on Feb 15, 2006 13:01:06 GMT -5
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Post by erishkigal on Apr 29, 2006 18:09:28 GMT -5
This is the first time i've written in a long time.
I'd love some feedback.
Dead are the candles in blood drinking moonlight
The eerie path we despair, obscured through mist
Encountering the corpse shadow of dawn
Forgotten chimes, wreathing pale in gloom
A cloud streaks across the moon
Sinking beneath the sky in our glass
Poised to your perfect lips
Upon the beach lay silent
Await the funereal tide
The moon an ethereal altar
Where Ereshkigal weeps in the catafalque sky
The grail shines benighted
As shore and soul coalesce
Tearing the dress from your distant nightfall
Your fearful, ancient last request
Oh the cold now
The breeze wet on your lonely gaze
Arches that loom above
The other from the loss finds its tide
Bloodstained encounters turn your gold black
On the chalice of mirrors
Where our desires can hide
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Post by Nyarlathotep on Apr 29, 2006 18:31:15 GMT -5
I'm not much of a poet, but I enjoyed your piece, erishkigal. It was very descriptive and flowed well. My only criticism is that there may have been too many references to the night sky, but it did set the mood. Overall, you did very well. Keep writing!
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Post by SparrowsSoliloquy on Apr 30, 2006 18:38:02 GMT -5
^ I think you did a great job as well. It was really discriptive and I liked the references to 'dawn' and 'moonlight' great job!- J |
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Post by erishkigal on May 1, 2006 6:12:51 GMT -5
Yeah I thought that too as a matter of fact Nyarlathotep.
Thanks for the feedback,
It will be further edited, maybe.
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Post by ravenous on May 25, 2006 8:09:39 GMT -5
Sweet Seduction Sweetly tasting of Monday picked roses She’ll leave me by this short week’s end Her sweet ripe love lingers like a child’s laughter Like a splintered spike inside a holy friend Her Judas covered alibi is swift and flies tomorrow Within my thoughts beside myself I whisper sighs of sorrow I bloody love this!! Very good. I haven't been on here in ages and its good to see your still writing some awesome stuff VOG. I also liked your poem erishkigal. Great stuff. ~ravenous |
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Post by Nyarlathotep on May 30, 2006 10:18:21 GMT -5
This is the first poem I've written in several months, so please don't criticize too harshly!
Cardinal Envy
5-30-2006
Blueberry scented candle
Reminds me of freshly baked muffins
Lazy Sunday mornings
Perusing the papers over black coffee
Crossword puzzles
Chuckling at brightly colored comic strips
Shaking my head sadly at the front page headlines
Pregnant woman killed in car accident
Gas prices soaring
Earthquake in Southeast Asia
War everywhere else
Outside a cardinal chirps for his mate
She’s on the other side of the house
But you and I are oceans apart
I hate Sundays
No mail delivery
Looking to the week ahead
Therapy appointments
Window shopping
Chinese food for lunch
Every day blurs into one
Until the year is almost over
Measuring time as if it really exists
Our lives a blink in the eye of eternity
Yet seemingly infinite
When one is envious of cardinals
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Thanks for all the inspiration guys! oh and vog I sent you a pm..
you keep a journal too? that is cool. I havent written in mine in awhile. I only gravitate towards it when Im going through a lot of stuff.. and when I just feel like writing. I think journals are great.. I only started one about five years ago.....
