The Poetry Thread, Part Two

[TheAnomicSoul]

Penicilate

I can't see much more light in you
All of what you denied leaks through you
I now see the painful truth
Cleaning out my thinking mind
Tugging on the thought of you feelin fine
Seeing who you are
Shows me who I really am

And everything deep inside
Everything I tried to hide
Has leaked from my wounds
And everything I tried to hide in my mind
Is coming out to show

As I see the signs of my own demise
I see inside my eyes
My own sick disguise
As I nod my head in approval
Thinking everything is fine
These tears begin to flow
When I remind myself that nothing is fine
Nothing will ever be fine

And I look into your bleeding iris
To see what you tried to hide
And I look deep into your heart
To see the coward that you are

Recollecting back
To that time
I tried to kill
Seeing everything fall before me
Looking back
Seeing the dying faces
Trying to maintaine
Trying to stay sane
And everything I love
Is raped and stolen from me
Looking back
Seeing eyes go black
Seeing angels taking them back
To penetentary
To slavery
Looking back!!!
Seeing things
I never ever wanted to see
Remembering
Take me back (looking back)
Take me back (looking back)
Looking inside you
Seeing the shadows
Of a fucked past

[britany]

I really,really loved that poem soul, you have a lot in you so don't ever,ever stop wrting b/c i enjoy all of your poems, a lot

[ravenous]

There are some awesome writings on here. Very good.
These are some recent lyrics of mine. Open to interpretation so go ahead.
Its been written recently about an ex. Thats all I'm saying.

SHOVE:

I can relate to your feelings
all they do is make me angry
effort needed for this friendship?
no I don't care about it
anyway.

Shove it.

You seem to be miserable
about believing I'm still
underneath you
Stop needing it because
I'm disliking you

Shove it, shove it
Shove it, shove it
shove it.

What else can I do?
Stop running from you
just get away and shove it
to somebody who cares

Shove it (till end)

It maybe easier to read with music behind it but I've still to get to that part.

[TheAnomicSoul]

^Those are very cool lyrics. Great job ;D

[TheAnomicSoul]

Here is a old poem I wrote. I never thought I'd share it with anyone. Especially a online message board. This is the only poem that actully made me cry while writing it. It's about 5 months old but I'll post it.

Six

The torment I kept inside all of these years
All of these tears
Remembering everything that happend
I was young and I did not know
I never did wrong
My childhood is tainted with your memories
There was no happiness
Only fear because of you
I cannot even hate you
I have no feelings for you
I cannot even hate you
After all you did
But I can't cry
Crying only brings back
The memories I tried to kill
All I can ask is why
Why did you take me
Why did you taint me
Discusted memories of my past
I tried to forget it all
But I see your face
And I cannot forget it all
I was young
And I did not even know
My childhood has been raped from me
Due to the rape you gave me
And I can't even hate you
I have no feelings for you
And I cant even hate you
After all of the things
And after all that I know
I cannot even hate you
Six and dumb
Six and sick
Six is what I hate about myself
I can't cry over you
Eventhough I tried to hard
I wonder where you are right now
I hope you are fucking dead
I am dead inside
Due to the pain you made me feel
Un-heard screams
Overlooked tears
Painful years of my past
This feeling will eternally last

[SparrowsSoliloquy]

Oh my God Kevin...I dont even know what to say or ask you. ...words escape me at this time. Im speechless.

[Nessie]

:'(I'm so sorry Kevin....this poem really gets the tears into my eyes

[Halo]

Kevin...thank you for being brave enough to share that with us. I feel your pain darling, I was six also.

[TheAnomicSoul]

Wow H. That's really weird.

[SparrowsSoliloquy]

Oh my God...sigh..you both have overcome a lot...Im here if you need me.. k? love to you both!- Jennifer

[ravenous]

theanomicsoul said:

^Those are very cool lyrics. Great job ;D

Thanks.
Your poem about your inner turmoil and your past is really sad. Both you and Halo are brave to talk about it. If you ever need to share your feelings about it, I'll listen.
*big hug to the both of you!*

[moneyisevil]

this shit is about the unjust bullshit that is going on here on this beautiful planet

Stop Lying

I’ve been met by roads diverged
Out and up above the tidal’s surge
Replace my notions of things I know
Justify the property of a monkey soul

Failed recognition, oblivious elimination of the natural world
Constructed consequence depraved response
The puppet sneers death out of his mouth
Words that molest thousands of poverish children
Win rigged elections

Nuclear destruction as a way of life
Breed intolerance
Honor ignorance
Kill compassion
Kill the children

Split the night sky with our hatred for one another

Remember to sever rational thought
Substitute with unawareness
Slit my throat and sew my eyes shut
This is the way it always has been
When corruption runs the world
We are left blind

Tell me that my rights are on a piece of paper
Tell me you must make freedom legal
Tell me you don’t know who the fuck you are
Tell me who the fuck I am
Make it legal for your precious greed

[TheAnomicSoul]

^That is really really good MIE. Great job

[fingerinthefissure]

moneyisevil said:

I’ve been met by roads diverged
Out and up above the tidal’s surge

sever rational thought
Slit my throat and sew my eyes shut
This is the way it always has been

I don't believe anyone can really comment on the way someone writes. However, I will say that and totally go against it.

I feel these are your strongest lines and I wish the rest of the words flowed along those lines. You have some good imagery going on in there and I wish you would ride it out more.

(by the way, this is part of what I meant in the other thread about "doing something") Keep it going.

[moneyisevil]

hey thanks alot for the input people....i appreciate it