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Post by britany on Jun 13, 2005 22:19:01 GMT -5
Can't write any thing right now but this is one i wrote awhile back........
Visions of light go in my mind at the back and i'm on the floor looking up at the end of the ceiling, after i get though with what i am thinking of, they walk to the water and look into it,they tell me to go for what your mistake was, looking back at it i see something will go wrong once again. This has been going on before i knew who you were, and you seem to invite me though your wrong way. should i be as nothing changed. my mind desertion has been the best way to help from knowing. going back to your careless memory,have i done wrong to leave you here alone.why is it always raining, why has it always been wrong, and why can i not ask. I am going back to where i once was to try to loose you from my mind.
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Post by erishkigal on Jun 14, 2005 1:21:05 GMT -5
Britany that was really good, actually its one of my favorites of yours, I think you have a your own writing style and I think that works for you. Your poems usually seem quite evocative of surreal and ethereal immagery that I cant really immagine or describe quite well but I think you express yourself in a very apropriate way, especially because I know you have issues revealing yourself,,,,as I do too  I lurve it! |
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Post by ravenous on Jun 15, 2005 7:43:45 GMT -5
Ravenous, That was also really good. You are a very talented writer. "The challenge has dissapeard. Finding someone to share this cage beats me further down." I really loved that part of it Thank you. Your stuff is also fantatsic. Halo when you said "is it a battle within the same person of not being able to be the person they want to be?" you hit the right place exactly. That is exactly what its about. Anger and unacceptance of myself and making it the same way for some people around me. |
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Post by Halo on Jun 15, 2005 21:12:23 GMT -5
Anger and unacceptance of myself and making it the same way for some people around me. Sorry to hear that ravenous, and I certainly know the feeling. It's great that you can express yourself so well. Hang around here, dear. We all help each other and are always here for each other. You have the board to express yourself and your feelings and even vent, and if you ever need to talk to someone, just PM me. Take care. |
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Post by Halo on Jun 15, 2005 21:15:23 GMT -5
Britany....that was very good!
Got writer's block? Don't worry about it. Feelings are best expressed when they are not forced.
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Post by TheAnomicSoul on Jun 15, 2005 23:09:05 GMT -5
Can't write any thing right now but this is one i wrote awhile back........ Visions of light go in my mind at the back and i'm on the floor looking up at the end of the ceiling, after i get though with what i am thinking of, they walk to the water and look into it,they tell me to go for what your mistake was, looking back at it i see something will go wrong once again. This has been going on before i knew who you were, and you seem to invite me though your wrong way. should i be as nothing changed. my mind desertion has been the best way to help from knowing. going back to your careless memory,have i done wrong to leave you here alone.why is it always raining, why has it always been wrong, and why can i not ask. I am going back to where i once was to try to loose you from my mind. That is really cool. I'm glad I read that |
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Post by britany on Jun 15, 2005 23:47:31 GMT -5
thank you all very much but to tell you the truth i hate that poem....
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Post by TheAnomicSoul on Jun 16, 2005 3:16:06 GMT -5
This is a hate driven song as u can probably tell after reading it.
Letter To Sarah
You look into my heart
Seek out what all you can take
Then I watch you pick away
Pick and rip away at me
I looked into your eyes
I never seen the lie deep inside of you
So I let you eat away at me
Raping me of everything
But there is something you cannot take
And that is my hate for you
(Chorus)
I fucking hate you
I wanna destroy you
I want to rape your beautiful smile
And make it mine
The hate for you
Grows inside of my black heart
I was blinded by your beauty
I was deaf by your lies
Brainwashed by your hollow love
Looking back
I didn't know
I wasn't aware of your lies
All I have left is hate for you
(Chorus)
I fucking hate you
I wanna beat you
Shred you apart
I want to fucking hurt you
As much as you did me and a little more
I hate you
I want to kill you
I wanna see you gone
So much pain
Impossible to erase
I'm left with your memories
Memories I want to poison
I want to kill everything in you
It was once mine
You tainted it all
I wanna kill it and I wanna kill you
Am I wrong for feeling all this hatred
To a person who doesn't deserve any feelings
Nothing in this world can make up for your deceit
All I can do is hate you
And wish you gone
(Chorus)
I HATE YOU
I HATE YOU
I HATE YOU
I FUCKING HATE YOU
I HATE.....YOU
Lol... Reading that and my signature is a little weird. It's completely antithetical.
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Post by ravenous on Jun 16, 2005 3:43:56 GMT -5
Anger and unacceptance of myself and making it the same way for some people around me. Sorry to hear that ravenous, and I certainly know the feeling. It's great that you can express yourself so well. Hang around here, dear. We all help each other and are always here for each other. You have the board to express yourself and your feelings and even vent, and if you ever need to talk to someone, just PM me. Take care. Thanks halo. Thats really nice. I'm glad I am able to express myself musically and lyrically. If nothing else it helps me a hell of a lot. I'd be a mess if I didn't have it. I'm eternally grateful for it. I never take it for granted. It helps that you guys are really nice. Britney...I haven't said this yet...I think your a really good writer. Theanomicsoul....^fantastic! |
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Post by britany on Jun 16, 2005 7:10:08 GMT -5
Thank you, and i just read your poem and i liked it a lot, and soul your poem was great.
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Post by Nessie on Jun 16, 2005 17:51:28 GMT -5
Soul....I really liked the poem, although it is really hateful, but you still seem to have a lot of feelings for her....very good!
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Post by TheAnomicSoul on Jun 20, 2005 2:06:31 GMT -5
New lyrics.
felo-de-se
Sick inside this home of pain
Crying and screaming to release this
Puking out my life inside
Seekin out a truth I won't find
Looking for a new home
Searching for a new place
I won't find shit
I won't find my peace
Nothing fucking matters anymore
Pull the trigger and say goodnight
I lay down and night
Hoping to see the light
This light that wil end this cursed life
A life of misery and pain
This pain that cuts me inside
And nothing in this world matters
Nobody here fuckin cares
No one will care what happens to me
Squeeze this trigger and end it all
Set me free (I want to be free)
Release me (I want to feel glee)
Fuckin save me (Am I worth saving)
Forget me (You never remembred anyways)
You never remembred
I lived for a short time
Am I supposed to go
This young like my friends
So young like everyone seems to do
Is this shit worth throwing away
Or should I keep these feelings inside
Pain and misery deep inside
My veins are filled with pain
My brain is full of shame
Am I the one to blame
For these uncontrollable thoughts
There is no one to blame
But myself, I did this to myself
I deserve what I get
And don't cry
I know you won't even bother
Kill me (Let me die and let me die now)
Bury me (six feet deep in this abyss)
Let me go (You aren't holding on)
Let me slip (Slip away from you)
There is no one here
No one can hear
Ending it all
Nothing to remember
Only these fucked tragedys
That fill my painful diary
God tells me to do it already
Come back home
Forgotten here
No one can hear
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Post by erishkigal on Jun 20, 2005 3:54:38 GMT -5
hey yall. Havnt been around for a week or so. Ive been creative, want to read my new poems? here they are I know this has a gay title but ill get around to that later. it is called.... untittledAfter tired nights And obsessive broken tears Self righteous stabbing pain And mechanic pathetic fears After nights in the rain Days on lonely isles Hours in torturous black And abhorrent phony smiles As I once again walk out Euphoric rays scribe and shout The answer on an emerald tablet Not quite ignorance, but without doubt I hold out my hands My zero grants me a gift Urim as black as swimming in pitch And thummim as white as northern switch Lustrous chides for power Abolition of the “I” Can we sail both paths Or lazily question why My sweet my sweet Not the only choice ill make My sweet my sweet To take the safe road a life of lies My sweet my sweet Or if I travel straight to you What shall we tell them? My sweet my sweet my autumn leaf. my next poem is called Words into wine, tears into rainAnd I wonder how life will be With forgetful eyes that never see Searching these halls eternally Vast as the sky unknowingly Through lonely arcades Through the empty white halls Through green windswept valleys Twin towers open the mountain walls Through thoughtless vaults like a child Past the fountain with waters so old Your face swimming behind frozen glass My nostalgic gaze so cold I lay one down, and the rest scatter like jewels The hour glass turned over Like basking in knowledge Delivered out from the mire From the chaotic abyss Like the beauty of pain Like the treasure trove of thought Like the rising nostalgia of a black goodbye Like the closure of that war far fought A sly smile crosses my face, as light is revealed in this curious place It is urim to thummim, and pleasure to pain, And not unlike Santiago, I turn into the rain. be honest |
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Post by TheAnomicSoul on Jun 20, 2005 12:14:09 GMT -5
Wow I really like those poems. I like the untitled one best. Don't really know why but I feel I can relate to that one. Great job |
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Post by britany on Jun 20, 2005 22:34:07 GMT -5
Really really great wrteing i loved them both keep the goodwork up, and your style of writeing is very different and i like it!
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