ravenous
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Post by ravenous on May 2, 2005 21:02:34 GMT -5
That poem reflections was stunning halo. Just thought I would say. I feel alive. And I feel alive I have seen everything This burden I have carried Has finally dissapeared. I have opened myself So I can be tasted All my life I have hidden And finally I have no fear. And this is me now I will try to survive. I have all I need here I have my heart.
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Post by Halo on May 2, 2005 21:19:13 GMT -5
Thanks ravenous. And welcome to the board!
Good to see you're jumping right in with some poetry.
Which by the way....is very good!
"I have all I need here. I have my heart." I love that.
Thanks for sharing and hope to see more of you around!
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Post by erishkigal on May 2, 2005 21:34:16 GMT -5
That poem reflections was stunning halo. Just thought I would say. I feel alive. And I feel alive I have seen everything This burden I have carried Has finally dissapeared. I have opened myself So I can be tasted All my life I have hidden And finally I have no fear. And this is me now I will try to survive. I have all I need here I have my heart. I wish that would happen to me. It was very good
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Post by Nessie on May 3, 2005 13:50:50 GMT -5
That was great, ravenous, I like it really very much! I love this positive message in it: And finally I have no fear. And this is me now I will try to survive. I have all I need here I have my heart. Hope to read more from you! Greetz, N.
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Post by ravenous on May 3, 2005 16:20:22 GMT -5
Thanks a lot guys. You said some really nice words. I wrote that poem when I had come out of a depression and I'd started to accept myself again, find myself. Its one of those poems I go back to when I get down. I'll post some more soon. Thanks again. *~Ravenous~*
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Post by TheAnomicSoul on May 3, 2005 23:59:13 GMT -5
That was very good revenous This PlacePull me from this silence Bury me in violence Overshadow me in darkness Inject some more saddness I'm better off without you But you still come back Wanting and craving For me to come back Return to you You still want me back But I dont want to go Go back to the place Where my sadness grew Where I became blue I dont want to go Back home I dont wanna leave And go back there I dont wanna go Back to that place Just let me be happy And dont take me back Whispers of fear call my name Calling me back home My fear begins to grow With all you put me through I dont wanna return to this place I try to erase this place From the depths of my mind But I dont wanna be left behind I just wanna find Some peice of mind I think I'm goin blind Leave me here Away from that fear No more tears After all these years I just wanna be happy Is that to much to ask The seed of depression grows in me Spreads and covers me Pain and resent leaks through me Nothing seems right In this place Which I'd like to erase This is a discrace
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Post by britany on May 4, 2005 19:45:36 GMT -5
I freaking love that good job soul
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Post by TheAnomicSoul on May 5, 2005 8:59:09 GMT -5
^Thank you Brit. Here is the poem u were despretly waiting for.
Neglectful Mary
You don't want me here You want me to disappear I won't speak again I won't show my face here ever again Silent and gone This is what you wanted A life without me I don't need to be You're better off without me I won't speak again I wont show my face here ever again I will remove myself from you
This umbilical cord has been cut As i drift away I wave good-bye And you dont notice You don't see me You never wanted too
I will move away from here As I shed a tear I begin to walk this path Without a caring hand I blow away in the sand This is something i never planned I will never understand Why it has to be this way I just wanted to stay But you wanted me away So I'll walk alone Without a home
Why cant we stay the same Am I the one to blame I look down in shame Look what I've became I have no name This is your perfect game That draws me to tears After all these years
You didnt want me around You wanted me out of your sight And I cry at night Wishing you were here You arent here It's alright Another lonley night It's alright
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Post by SparrowsSoliloquy on May 5, 2005 14:21:35 GMT -5
Amazing work everybody!-sparrow
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Post by Halo on May 5, 2005 18:32:01 GMT -5
Amazing work everybody!-sparrow Yea....it is. You guys have all opened up so much from when you first came here. I'm really proud of all of you. You've been expressing yourselves so passionately. It's so good to see you all being so creative with your thoughts and feelings. And as always, thanks for sharing them with us.
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Post by britany on May 5, 2005 20:34:48 GMT -5
I am soo glad to read it and sad i had to wait but i mad it, exellent work soul write more so i can read more But really it was great!! Love, Britany
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Post by britany on May 5, 2005 21:06:52 GMT -5
I haven't really been in a writing mood so i put somethings together and this is what i have hope you like it:
Today twilight fell on us and it rained despair, we are broken from this pain and we have brought the sorrow are self's, I feel like what i am set on is that edge is very near to me now, I try to tell you how i'm feeling but that ruins every thing, as this goes on we will be locked in this dark world that is our own. You leave me here alone and broken and bound for the past to repeat and I have no where to recollect my sanity, so many things have gone wrong something has to go right. Now and worse this life seems useless and i have gone down the wrong road i have no guidance from you or anyone that is here, you have now deceived me and have gone the other way I have been left to suffocate on my pain, this is the end of the road I will be put away, and you will go on forever with out thought...
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Post by TheAnomicSoul on May 5, 2005 22:30:23 GMT -5
Thank you to you all And Britany, that was incredable. Very great work. Thank you for sharing it with us. You are a great poet keep it up
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Post by Halo on May 5, 2005 23:01:15 GMT -5
Very nice Britany. Keep writing, you're doing so well.
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Post by ravenous on May 6, 2005 6:43:55 GMT -5
I haven't really been in a writing mood so i put somethings together and this is what i have hope you like it: Today twilight fell on us and it rained despair, we are broken from this pain and we have brought the sorrow are self's, I feel like what i am set on is that edge is very near to me now, I try to tell you how i'm feeling but that ruins every thing, as this goes on we will be locked in this dark world that is our own. You leave me here alone and broken and bound for the past to repeat and I have no where to recollect my sanity, so many things have gone wrong something has to go right. Now and worse this life seems useless and i have gone down the wrong road i have no guidance from you or anyone that is here, you have now deceived me and have gone the other way I have been left to suffocate on my pain, this is the end of the road I will be put away, and you will go on forever with out thought... I really liked that. I related to it in a way. 'tis cool.
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