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Post by voiceofgod on Feb 28, 2005 15:56:17 GMT -5
I'm from Portugal, small town, sinkhole  No "toolies" around in miles, so it's quite a lonely place to live in, to me of course, hehe. we're all with you in spirit, brother. |
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Post by Halo on Mar 1, 2005 23:15:34 GMT -5
Indecisive:
Damn money, I don't know what it is about your poems, or why it is....but I feel very connected to them.
Maybe it's the way I intrepret them. They are like a good song in that way. I don't know what your intention was when writing them, what they mean to you.....but they mean a lot to me.
Thanks.
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Post by moneyisevil on Mar 2, 2005 15:53:58 GMT -5
indecisive:
for me the poem is about this woman walking under a bridge...a whithered woman if you will...and she passes a graveyard...only to fast forward her life to her own funeral..after she realizes she wasted her life by not making choices or not putting enough thought into her choices.....and the preacher speaking...and i dunno...
She was clawing at the top
And breaking all her nails
Etching immortality
But now there’s no one there
To me i just picture a woman who is buried alive who claws at the top of the coffin trying to get out...but no one is there to rescue her...this is my favorite shit that i ever wrote....heres another im really proud of and its only 3 days old..
Accumulation of thought Written: 2/28/05
I’m exhausted from climbing this ladder of confusion
Precious breaths get shorter
As the belt whips across my chest
Pass down the tradition
Whip our children of hope
Rape the innocent and
Tell ourselves it’s all right
As long as there’s a martyr
I’m heading towards a holy struggle
Shred the sheets
Shred the sheets in vain
To this catastrophic wide eyed blur
Into my cancer cataract
Scaring the new born innocence
No more
Open the hole
Please precious
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Post by voiceofgod on Mar 2, 2005 15:56:09 GMT -5
Indecisive: Damn money, I don't know what it is about your poems, or why it is....but I feel very connected to them. Maybe it's the way I intrepret them. They are like a good song in that way. I don't know what your intention was when writing them, what they mean to you.....but they mean a lot to me. Thanks. maybe you're secretly in love and long to hold the evil money monkey!?! lmao  |
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Post by Halo on Mar 2, 2005 16:26:10 GMT -5
maybe you're secretly in love and long to hold the evil money monkey!?! lmao OMG!!! That's what it is!! Your poems have penetrated and awakened that which I have repressed for so long......... a deep, dark, hidden desire for............... HOT MONKEY LOVE. ;D |
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Post by voiceofgod on Mar 3, 2005 11:54:07 GMT -5
That's why I love you Halo!!  lmao  |
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Post by TheAnomicSoul on Mar 6, 2005 2:03:34 GMT -5
This is one of my poems that actully rhymes.
Process
Looking up to see your face
Looking in discrace
Looking down
To see the ground
No more frown
You're hurting evreything around me
Killing all the emotions inside of me
I break inside when I look into your eyes
I'm locking myself away from you
All this pain you've caused can't be true
When you lie I cry
When you try I die
Desentegrating inside
Gathering up my pain to hide
Looking to another side
Looking to lose bein blind
As I look into your picture
You slowly fade out
As I smile with no doubt
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Post by Halo on Mar 6, 2005 11:04:23 GMT -5
Very nice Kevin!!
"Killing all the emotions inside of me" (I've been there!)
I hope you post more of your poems.
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Post by TheAnomicSoul on Mar 6, 2005 14:19:18 GMT -5
Very nice Kevin!! "Killing all the emotions inside of me" (I've been there!) I hope you post more of your poems. Thank you so much  Yea i think we all have had that type of person in our lives that has done that before, relationship wise or not.I will post more of my poems as soon as i can finalize them or find my notebook.I only have like 12 poems done.I started in November of last year.I dont know why but i just wrote a poem reflecting off a certain feeling and there we go I got a poem.I'll try to find that poem and post that. |
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Post by moneyisevil on Mar 7, 2005 15:10:56 GMT -5
The Anomicsoul....
thank you for your poem...i could really relate to it and it brought up emotions that i havent felt in a while....anger towards others for hurting u...i try not to let anger play a big role in my life but ur peom reminded me of it for some reason
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Post by moneyisevil on Mar 7, 2005 15:17:47 GMT -5
Slaughter the Compassion
Dissipating in the distance
Was the compassion we once held
Only for a brief moment
Every atom made sense
Well, I know it’s gone
Rush to fill the emptiness
Revolve your rotation around what cripples him
Revolve your rotation around the disease the claims you
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Post by TheAnomicSoul on Mar 7, 2005 15:52:05 GMT -5
Thanx I liked yours too.Here's a poem i wrote about my friend My Farewell When tomorrow starts without you Don't think we're far apart Just know that you have a place in my heart You left this world without a goodbye And you left me wondering why I wish i was there for you & your troubled times All I can do now is remoness on the greatest friendship You were there for me & I was there for you Saddley I wasnt this time Your coffin rests on my concience You were my bestfriend and always will be You may not be here physiclly but you are in spirit It's so hard to hide the pain I'm feeling I wish you didnt go out like this You had so much to live for & now it's gone I'll still love you & I'll see you when I get there As you can tell that poem is about a friend who killed himself.That poem took me like 2 weeks to fully finish which is the longest time I ever had writing one. |
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Post by voiceofgod on Mar 7, 2005 15:58:14 GMT -5
Wow A-Soul that one hit home. I had a friend die a few years back and that made me think of him. Good poem.  |
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Post by TheAnomicSoul on Mar 7, 2005 17:13:17 GMT -5
Thanx.Losing a friend is never easy.I hope my poem didnt make you remember him or her in a bad way.But I'm glad you liked it.
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Post by voiceofgod on Mar 7, 2005 18:29:53 GMT -5
Thanx.Losing a friend is never easy.I hope my poem didnt make you remember him or her in a bad way.But I'm glad you liked it. I could neverk think of ZNL in a bad way. He was like my brother. It's never good to remember the dead in a bad way....could come back to fuck with you. |
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Yea i think we all have had that type of person in our lives that has done that before, relationship wise or not.I will post more of my poems as soon as i can finalize them or find my notebook.I only have like 12 poems done.I started in November of last year.I dont know why but i just wrote a poem reflecting off a certain feeling and there we go I got a poem.I'll try to find that poem and post that.