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Post by Halo on Jun 27, 2005 23:28:00 GMT -5
*sits down next to Joel and Brit* And marvels at the talent on this board. You guys are great. And once again I have to thank you all for sharing your poems. Some of which I know are very personal and I'm glad you feel comfortable posting them here. I know we all are glad that you do.
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Post by erishkigal on Jun 28, 2005 2:04:08 GMT -5
*internet hug*
you're greater.
here's a short one =)
wine and dusks malice With dark compositions, Bleak dawns, Familiar waters And slow realizations
We spoke in tongue, riddle and rhyme
out brief candle End the tranquil glow Watch the fire in the rain Scatter the remains out of sight Do not rebuild the temple
The instructions for hope lie shredded
In ecstasy we laugh at the irony A compressing supernova Of what has already been crucified There was nothing there at all Save a myriad feeble scream
Cut the thread Out, out brief candle Forget what you have witnessed And don’t dare look back
Hope is not lost, it was never there
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Post by erishkigal on Jun 28, 2005 2:16:05 GMT -5
as the day sails away No night has been so dark No winter has been so cold No script has been this obscured Nor any hope been this false
And I met lady rain She covered the grass in a white coat of ice
What she gave brought cold:
Tears blow through the halls Like bitter draughts outside Bitter confusion blows Like a slow death in the cold
My little leaf floats out of sight Sailing the winds of life I am left alone with echoing sighs A cautious bird on blackened skies
Like pierot my warm lullaby Echoes in memories halls Cut this thread three sisters For what once was is now gone
No siren had cracked this stone But the forests desire was known Eyes brimming with decrepitude Lost amongst statues of gold
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Post by TheAnomicSoul on Jun 28, 2005 2:47:23 GMT -5
^Very good writings there Joel. I really like your writings alot Ravenous, Thank you for your comment Your lyrics for prison were outstanding... Very great work
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Post by erishkigal on Jun 28, 2005 3:18:22 GMT -5
Thanks Soul,,,you rock my socks hardcore.
I liked Prison too Ravenous, pretty tittle
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Post by ravenous on Jun 28, 2005 17:32:38 GMT -5
Thank you Anomicsoul and Erishkigal. I think you two are amazing writers. I love the above poems Erish. I love all the writings on here. So much talent. And Halo, I don't think I've been on a message board where people were so nice before!! Its great.
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Post by Halo on Jun 28, 2005 17:54:59 GMT -5
It is really nice ravenous. We have a great group of people here. I think it's partly due to stressing respect for MJK and all the members in the rules and any disrespect will not be tolerated. I think the flamers decided they didn't like the rules. That.....and I got damn lucky to have all you great people come here!
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Post by ravenous on Jun 29, 2005 19:53:45 GMT -5
Its a fantastic board. ;D A new poem I wrote.
LOVE IS:-
Love is pain of an unhealthy obsession This love torture with too many a consequence. Its diving down beyond the normal. Your whole world taken apart for this new soul. A dying repentance a forgotten dying sore.
Love is feeling euphria for only a second while the hurt can last a lifetime. That comfort of being numb to learn the deepness of another The light, laughter and honesty The obsession setting in.
Its what love is.
Hope you like. Any q's...Just ask.
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Post by erishkigal on Jun 30, 2005 0:04:44 GMT -5
wow ravenous,,,that was very good =) im serious, heh, I really enjoyed that. I think I can relate,,,,,the whole "unhealthy obsession" thing.
here is my contribution for the day, might be the last thing for some time as im working on a bigger less structured and more unintelligble piece that wont be ready for sometime, and that will probably be my last piece for a time. =)
the sky brings crisis Machine noises of impending chaos This is beyond discomfort The concluding crisis marches through the fog This is beyond negativity
I find no solace in emptiness I find no solace in warmth I find no solace in nirvana I find no solace in hope
The ringing pierces deeper A synthesized shriek, wreaths above the mist Of a frozen lake
I fear When they are separated from their families They will not understand For in understanding only, There is a tiny iota of content
I see the sounds of suffering I hear the colours of famine I taste the feel of lust And feel the sounds of sweeping hate
Everything is lost Everything is cold Everything is gone Everything is blind
Death is not enough
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Post by ravenous on Jun 30, 2005 17:35:16 GMT -5
wow ravenous,,,that was very good =) im serious, heh, I really enjoyed that. I think I can relate,,,,,the whole "unhealthy obsession" thing. I see the sounds of suffering I hear the colours of famine I taste the feel of lust And feel the sounds of sweeping hate Everything is lost Everything is cold Everything is gone Everything is blind Thanks a lot for your comment. I really loved that poem you posted especially the above part. Its really good. Your a really good writer.
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Post by erishkigal on Jun 30, 2005 23:11:41 GMT -5
aww, thanks Ms Ravenous. heh, yeah, I think I might change that last line. I like that idea,,,but the line sounds too much like a james bond movie,,huh.
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Post by Halo on Jun 30, 2005 23:41:49 GMT -5
aww, thanks Ms Ravenous. heh, yeah, I think I might change that last line. I like that idea,,,but the line sounds too much like a james bond movie,,huh. I hope you don't mean "Death is not enough". I love that line. Don't change it! I'm happy for you that you are working on a larger project Joel, but I am so going to miss reading your poetry. It's hard for me to reply to each one, especially when I have been just checking in here quickly while finishing the website......but I want you to know I do read them all and enjoy them very much. You're a wonderful writer. Thanks for sharing what you have.
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Post by Halo on Jun 30, 2005 23:48:00 GMT -5
Its a fantastic board. ;D Thanks ravenous!! But the board is great because we have such great people here. Love is feeling euphria for only a second while the hurt can last a lifetime. Oh yea....I think we all probably have shared your feelings of love that you wrote about in this poem. I really like the way you express yourself in your poems, ravenous. Thanks for posting them. And keep 'em coming!
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Post by TheAnomicSoul on Jul 1, 2005 0:22:41 GMT -5
The Void You Gave
All this shit right here is for you You think you can see me Through my smiling face How bad are you That you cant See all this torment that I lived through the years How can you not see the truth With everything I've done To myself and to you all Don't try to smile for me now I dont need it now Cause you were never fuckin there When I needed you the most You dissapeared And there I was Alone and bleeding through My own hate and misery All because of you And you never tried to change What you broken inside of me Why see the lies You planted here I cant help but look away From the face that I once loved How can you not see what goes on inside What you want to see you see You dont see the truth How can this be so fucked like this Why cant you see this pain inside Why dont you try To reconize all of this hate I tried to keep inside All of this time I'll take what's mine And leave you With what you Left me long ago Nothing All of this shit Will never change All of this writing i am doin Will never help this pain That you gave to me Why to me Why cant you See who you Really are What I see in you What I hate about you Is everything you came to be From everything you were back then All of this change Has shown me that this life that you have lived Is more fucked than mine can be How do you try to make things right When all you did was fuck it up You fucked my life Now I cant cry for you I dont fuckin care about you Why should I care What have you done for me That hasnt fucked me up What can you do To make it go away Nothing at all
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Post by britany on Jul 1, 2005 17:29:24 GMT -5
I loved that poem soul, great once again and i love the title
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